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Fyrebird

Post by Celeste~ on October 18th 2010, 10:34 pm

Name: Fyrebird
Gender: Tom
Age: 20 moons
Affiliate: FireClan
Rank: Warrior

Looks: He is a ginger tom with amber eyes. He is quite big for his age. He also has dark ginger rings around his ears, legs and tail. His fur is medium length.
Personality: Despite his large size, he couldn't give a damn about fighting. He doesn't tend to take things seriously and isn't really afraid of anything. He is one to look at things as a glass half full rather than half empty. He won't do anything if he thinks it's not going to be worth anything, but he is relatively easygoing otherwise.
Birth: FireClan

History: He was a very playful kit, and he had a habit of shredding leaves. He was a good apprentice and he soon learned all the moves. He couldn't be stuffed being a show-off or great fighter or hunter or something. He became a warrior quickly, and was a good one. He has never had a mate. He had a few friends though. Overall, not a very unusual life or anything.


Last edited by [kyuu] I. AM. JUSTICE! on October 22nd 2010, 3:55 pm; edited 2 times in total (Reason for editing : You had three words that were not words, and you had a grammer error. >>)
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Re: Fyrebird

Post by KYUU on October 19th 2010, 6:46 am

D< ENGLISH TEACHER ALERT.

Seriously? When it says a certain about of SENTENCES, it doesn't mean FRAGMENTS. >> Change all of the fragments in the history into complete sentences.


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Post by Celeste~ on October 21st 2010, 10:29 pm

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Post by KYUU on October 22nd 2010, 3:56 pm

-sigh- I fixed a few things for you. Gosh, I am such a Grammer/English Nazi. =w= No wonder my friends call me Germany.

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